3: Fracas

"He is awakening" went an ignored whisper in the small observation room. Humorous it was, to call the shabby facility an 'observation room', but given the short amount of time and uncongenial locale, everyone for thankful for whatever they had. It was the Kid's idea to call it that, and the name struck.

Anyway, what was far more pressing, and more fascinating, lay on the other side of the glass separating the observers and the observee. There, on a typical clinical berth, in the centre of a sealed enclosure, lay a human form, silent and unmoving. State-of-the-art medical apparatus monitored his vitals.

The ECG had just started showing blips now-and-then. The half a dozen or so attendees were all breathing deeply, no-one daring to hazard any guesses as to the outcome of the next hour, or the next century.

"What do we tell him once he's up?", braved a woman's voice, breaking the heavy silence. The question uttered as though open, but no-one was in doubt as they all waited upon the person in-charge, the Kid.

Posted by : Varun Torka on Wednesday, May 20, 2009 | Labels: , |

 

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Comments working again! You know what to do when something works, right? USE IT !! PS - If you are new and havn't realised yet....you have to read in order and from the first chapter!

Edits

Humans are here to make mistakes and better ones to correct them and those who still want something else to do document them...here...
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by Varun: Slight edits to
Opera - Trivial solution to Taleb problem implmnted.
Cherole - changed the name in last line
Machinations - added a line for time perspective. Melee - used full name of Mine
Hope the authors don't mind.
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Suggestion: @kinari
Lets keep mine and drake separate. You ll have to change one reference.
Implementaion:
Done now he is our Dr. Debye
by Varun
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Suggestion: @Amrit
Add quotation marks, wherever you want to show conversation.
Implementation:

Self Edit:
Edited "Mother" to "Machination" in Chapter8 and made some other subtle changes. Most imortantly reducing two demos to one.
by Tejesh
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Loose Ends

Space for collaboration among authors.

its ok if Taleb is not Kid. but i wanted kid to be a mentor of cherole. taleb can be a different person.
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The problem of Mr. Taleb:
The problem is that Mr. Taleb is a living real person. So at most we can use it as a referense to a theory which he has proposed in reality. We cannot make him the main character in our story "the kid". What I suggest is - Lets keep Taleb as Cherole's mentor. But after that leave Taleb. Keep Kid (still need to find a name for him) as a friend and an encourager to Cherole. I mentioned it in my chapter. "one other person who discussed it with her".That is Kid
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@kinari: lets keep mine and drake separate. You ll have to change one reference.
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We need a formal name for Kid to use in conversations. Sticking with 'Doctor' for now

I think it would be less hair-pulling crazy if we don't touch each other's technology. Not as if its banned, but the workings.
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oye drake and mine are the same person right? Mine D.!

let the section explode, we have lot of space inthe margin + will get to know what our doubts were in the beginning.- just keep answering on the top so that it is easier for us to read

i did not get the concept of mutation, so i assumed that it won't matter much in the story of the 10th chapter. If you have something in mind introduce the funda later.

ya we can keep 8th chapter a new day altogether.
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Delete the question you are answering...or this section will explode....-

@tejesh: just a suggestion, but I think it would be better if this marked a different day, the first 7/8 chapters fit well together, maybe we can keep them seperate...
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Location can be anywhere, but as the names are American...somewhere there.